The Improbable One's Blog

Note: This is a prologue of a short story that I have to write. I need suggestions on sentence formation, grammar and writing style, so feel free to criticise.  'I must reach the sun', I thought looking at the hundreds of glistening pieces of our beloved star. A giant fireball cut into pieces by the icy ocean. My body went numb to save me from dying. But for how long? The funny thing about our sophisticated human body is that, when it's submerged into water at subzero temperature; the blood is withdrawn from our limbs and torso then sent to our brain to save it from dying. But the only possible way for it to survive is to get out of the water. So how can it survive if the body is numb and unmovable? How can I? But I have to live. I must live. I must reach the sun. My body craves for oxygen; I have to breathe. I must move. I must reach the sun.                     ***

                                                          Life! As we call it. They say it all started some 13.77 billion years ago, and the maelstrom of particles then lead to this planet and us residing on it. Some say 'GOD' created all this. However it all came to be, there are about 8.7 million species on this planet and they all have many different sensory organs to perceive this world. The eye however is considered the best way to behold this absolutely majestic universe we live in. But I never knew how it all looks. No! I'm not blind; I never knew how the world looks physically. All I can see are numbers, equations, letters and symbols. Some I learned, some I haven't yet, and some doesn't exist in any books on this planet.  PS : This is just a concept for making a short animation video I am thinking about....

The earth stood still and the sun went round,  With the blistering moon and the stars all around.  I stood and watched as the smoke surrounds,  I choked to death with people all around.  I woke up.  I sat, silently in the hall  And I tried to recall.  The dream,  What could it possibly mean?  The infinite darkness in the sunlight beam.  Is it destruction’s grand scheme? 

There is a darkness in me, I do not know how it’s shaping me.. Or is it I, turning into me? To find the things choking me, I went to the desert across the sea, To find nothing but a lonely hill. I crept forward and climbed the hill. I saw; struggling worm, in a bird’s bill, I smiled; ‘It’s me who’s withholding me.’ ================================================ I’m gentrified, Oh! I didn't lie. I say this not to defy, But to say good-bye. I tried hard to play my part, But couldn't keep your thoughts apart. So, the hardest part was letting go, not taking part. I knew I had to tell, To break this spell. But you couldn't tell, What made me fall, And why you look so tall… =======================================================================

I watched the folks in a jewellery store, gaping at the gold led before. They smiled and awed at the shining gold, and wondered why. Unaware, ignorant of the fact that it once shone brightly in the sky. In order for us to live, A star must die! The sun, the moon, the planets and asteroids, including    the earth where we reside. Once shone brightly in the sky. In order for us to live, A star must die! The air we breathe, the water we drink, the food we eat, the clothes we wear, the life we love, and the death we fear, it’s possible because  it  died. The things we love each other for to the gold we kill each other for, once brightly shone in the sky. In order for us to live, a star must die! A star that lived before us, brightly shone in the sky. It still shines brightly, as us, now that it has died. In order for us to live, a star must die! A star must die!       ...

All these wars All these peace talk All these love And all these hate Are painted deep into my mind Please, take these pictures away; go ahead Erase everything from my head All my good All my sins All my friends And every kith and kin Are painted deep into my mind Please, take these pictures away; go ahead Erase everything from my head Let me refresh ...